Every line of your dialogue should include quotation marks that begin and end each exchange. For example, the first two lines of your conversation should read as:
"Now we fish together again."
"No. I am not lucky. I am not lucky anymore."
And so on. That way, when you return to the narrative in a new paragraph, the reader will understand the difference between when the characters speak and when the essayist returns.
Is this entire block a quotation from The Old Man and the Sea? If so, make sure to copy it exactly as Ernest Hemingway wrote it, or exactly as it appears in the source you are using. If there are cues like "the boy said," you must (or at least should) include them. Those cues must appear outside the quotation marks, though. For example, I believe the full text reads:
"The hell with luck," the boy said. "I'll bring the luck with me."
These character cues allow the reader to follow the dialogue more easily. I see you took this one out and inserted an ellipsis in its place. I wouldn't do this. You want to make your essay as logical and as easy to understand as possible.
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